The Art of Seduction *g
It be hard to pass up a class with so much promise. And it was a great class. I learn’d how ta use the right words, what the right format be, how ta concisely sum up what I be pitchin’…it were a grand class. She had us researchin’ agents, editors, pub houses…and it all were posted. So, bein’ the pirate I be, it were handy ta a…liberate…this info fer me personal list a’ resources. (Ask me later, I be willin’ ta share…)
Julie has proven ta be a ready source of inspiration and advice. She be a double Golden Heart Finalist and her ambition is ta be one a’ the crownin’ jewels of Harlequin. She's also a published freelancer with articles appearing in The Romance Writer's Report, Canadian Living, Today's Parent, Reader's Digest (Canada) and other magazines. She been writin’ medical romances fer over ten years and if’n yer nice, she may relate her experience with rejection and revision. (It be a terrible tale a’ sadness and woe…tho she made it inta a bit a’ inspirational story.)
Taday, Julie be sharin’ her tips on how ta put tagether that most elusive and dreaded a’ all submission packages… The Synopsis! Also known as the Art of Seducing the Reader. (What? Ya thought I meant somethin’ else?)
Take it away, Julie. I be mannin’ the bar and ready ta serve up somethin’ ta wet yer whistle when ya needs it. Hope ya likes rum!
Who?
What?
Why?
Who are the characters?
What do they want? (Motivation)
Why can't they have it? (Conflict)
Make sure you're talking about the right conflict, because there are two kinds, external and internal. External conflict is concerned with the plot, the events and the repercussions of those events. Internal is concerned with the deeper goals, needs and fears of the characters.
'Fighting an evil sorceress' or 'saving the world' are the external conflicts. Answering the question "What do they want" should address not the chase or investigation or battle, but what do the characters want deep down in their soul that will make them complete as a person. Is it love? Trust? Belonging? Security? Justice? Repentance? Forgiveness? What do the characters need to be complete? And what stands in their way? Usually it's the competing needs of another character. So, if the hero needs Justice for being wronged, the heroine might need Forgiveness for wronging him or someone he identifies with. The two needs are incompatible. This is your
internal conflict.
Many writers mistake exciting, adventurous or unusual external conflicts for internal conflict. It's easy to do. But, conflict that's not deep enough is often why manuscripts are rejected. We must constantly remind ourselves that our book isn't about the mystery that needs solving, it's about what the characters need to survive and thrive.
Let's dissect an example. This is the 'walk-the-plank' pitch for my medical thriller, RESSURECTION:
"In an effort to create a vaccine for a lethal new flu variant, research virologist, Dr. Ally Johnson attempts to rebuild the deadly Spanish Flu of 1918, but ends up resurrecting the disease that killed over forty million people world wide. Ally has to work fast if she's to prevent this plague
from sweeping across the world again, with herself as its first victim."
Who is the character? Dr. Ally Johnson.
What does she want? - She couldn't save the life of someone she loved in the past, so now her goal is TO SAVE AS MANY LIVES AS SHE CAN.
Why can't she achieve her goal? LACK OF TRUST. She believes trusting someone else is what killed her loved one, so even though she's dying of the same disease she's trying to cure, she can't trust others enough to let them help her.
Once you understand what the conflict is in its most basic terms you can then clothe it in the setting and events of the story.
The synopsis just enlarges the story details, but it's important to keep that conflict center stage at all times.
Here are a few pitch writing exercises to help you figure out what your basic conflicts are and which story events best show off those conflicts:
Write your pitch in first person POV.
Write your pitch with a limit of 100 words.
Write your pitch with NO adverbs or adjectives.
Write your pitch as if you're interviewing the main characters (you're the journalist asking the characters questions). Keep it limited to one page single spaced.
Write your pitch like a nutrition food label.
Take your 100 word pitch and enlarge it by 50 more words.
Let's have some fun - write and post your 'walk-the-plank' pitch in the comments section. It can be no more than two sentences long and it must answer the three key questions:
Who are the characters?
Why can't they have it? (Conflict)
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Mornin' crew! Well, tis evenin' fer me...but thought I'd get the blog rollin' wit' me version of the Ms. Snark challenge... I be workin' on the last assignment, but knowin' how late I usually show up...
Bar be open! Enjoy crew...and here be my six line pitch...
A Caribbean Spell
Miranda lost her 20th century world to a devastating earthquake. Her grief opens a new talent within her, to walk between the worlds of time and space. Seeking a cause to die for, she stumbles upon the Caribbean of Jack Reynard, where pirates sail through magical seas.
Reynard is a consummate pirate and raising sail to save the world is the last thing he expects to be caught up in. But if that is what it takes to keep the fascinating witch he’s rescued, then so be it. Falling in love was not supposed to be part of the plan.
OK, here's me two line pitch fer "The Changed World". Julie, I think this sorta sucks, but two lines? Can I please 'ave another one?
Time fell out of place, leaving Ivy and Duran in a changed world. She lives to kill her rapist, not settle down with Duran, while he lives for Ivy and fears her thirst for vengeance will make his dream impossible.
I've been working on one line pitches all week, lol, you want two?
Welcome aboard Julie!
If you're not keen on rum, I just happen to have a bottle of vintage scotch with me and some ice made from pure English mineral water. I think Chance tolerates it as I'm the only male English pirate aboard, but I have to keep it hidden in the Crow's nest. If you should fancy a noggin I'll be happy to serve. :wink:
By using semicolons one can create some rather long sentences but I'll try to stick with the spirit of 'walk the plank'!
Jacqueline is poor but has both Siren and human blood and has inherited Siren powers which give her advantages in the world of men. Against all Siren instincts, she falls in love with a rich cricketing Lord and struggles to overcome class differences to win him by fair human means.
Gah, I'm not sure I can share yet. Let me work on it today (my query is ROUGH). LOL!
Welcome aboard, Julie!
I love exercises! Wait, let me rephrase. I love writing exercises!
BUT (you knew there had to be a BUT) I don't have anything finished enough to sum it back down. LOL! Maybe my short story? Huh. *thinks hard* Nah, that won't work either.
Celi Cooper has worked for three years to prove to her boss she has what it takes, and when the boss has to leave town she finally gets the chance to handle a client on her own. When the relationship between Celi and her client goes from professional to personal, she'll have to make a choice between following the bosses "strictly business" policy and her own heart.
*catches breath* That was HARD!
For me to write anything in two sentences is a painful, nearly impossible task.
The Long Way Home
Dori Marshall fled the spotlight of her husband’s celebrity to establish a life in her hometown, Gentry, Georgia, a life that brings her security, contentment, and growing recognition for her portrait quilts, a life she is determined to protect for her daughter and for herself. But can her resolve hold against the ex-husband who still haunts her heart and who has come to Gentry to reclaim the family he lost and to find a way to hold on to the music that defines him?
Poor Janga. LOL! I'm sure that was painful. But you did it! So much angst and emotion in two little (okay, not so little..lol) sentences!
Hmmm, it's feeling as if these stories belong more to one character than the other (which is usually the case--I would argue for this); however, my Adam & Eve story, they're both pretty equal. I'm not sure who the story belongs to more. I want to give it to Adam, because Adam is the one who wants his wife back; but Eve, I feel, makes the most growth (so it should be her story.)
Adam and Eve fail marriage counseling and are sent to Earth to find their true soul mates. In Vegas, they find 20th century dating (and living) is far more dangerous than any of the wilds they encountered when they were here before. Neither of them wants to admit defeat or settle back into an unhappy marriage, so the speed dating is on as they spend the next 40 days searching for their perfect match. However, what are they going to do when they realize they are each other's perfect match?
Mine's too long. And doesn't sound very exciting.
The original "made-for-each-other" couple want a divorce, but they can only have one if they find their real soulmates first. Dropped back to Earth with an unexpected tourguide, Adam & Eve learn that sometimes what you want really is what you have.
Yeah, that's my book. What Terri said!
I'll try not be jealous and sulk all day that Terri made it look that easy.
Yeah, I'm so good because I can write two sentences. LOL! Doesn't help if you CAN'T WRITE AN ENTIRE BOOK! LMAO!
Okay, it takes me forever and ever of obsessing to get these things just right.
I spent all week on my one liners.
Here's the one liner for Cherish Me.
She's a cigar smoking, gun toting, train robbing gambler, but it's his outlaw heart she threatens to steal away.
I'm not completely satisfied by close.
Here is my two lines. Definitely not settled on these.
Abandoned by her parents in their search for gold, Darby (O'Donnell) is on a war path to save young girls from the swinging saloon doors, a fate she herself near suffered.
A man doesn't survive Andersonville prison without becoming an animal and before Garrison McGuire can disappear into the mountains he must clear his conscience and assure the safety of his orphaned nieces, but one distrustful woman stands in his way.
Six lines would take me way too long.
I LOVE the one-liner, Renee. The only change I'd make in the 2-liner is to tie Darby's name into the second sentence because they kind of look like two different books. I'm assuming Darby is the distrustful woman? LOL!
Yep, Terri, they are the same.
I noticed my tags didn't quite work. *rolls eyes*
Hopefully, I'll get these set. I've been wanting to work on queries this week anyway. So this is great. Dh, I'm sure is wondering why I'm not at the shop. :)
Don't think of it as your blurbs not being small enough, think of it as your plots being to big! Sort of that "...the pictures got small" thing. LOL!
Is this the one that used to be called The Hellion? I can't wait to read that story.
Yeah, it's the same. LOL my plots are always too big. Right now I'm supposed to be trimming but somehow I added about 30 pages and I haven't even made it to chapter 4 yet.
Uhm, you'll cut in chapter 5? LOL!
I'm wit' Hellion, let's toss Terrio overboard, she's too good at this! I may lock 'er in a closet at Nationals and force 'er to come up with a fab-o pitch fer me...
I've poked at Julie...I think she's stuck in classes.
I think I'll have to stand my plank. You can't throw Terri overboard! I mean it might suck that she's good. But sheesh, having someone good at something on the boat besides drinking all the rum is a good thing. Trust me. While you're scratching the quill and ready to shoot the undead monkey for the millionth time, Terrio just might swagger along and give you that brilliant idea saving you an immense amount of bullets.
Sheesh! Computer glitches, duplicate comments. Has someone pirated the pirate ship?
Sailin' the cyber seas be treacherous...
Oooh! Pistols at dawn! I dibbed her first! She's gonna 'elp me wit' me pitch first!
And Terrio be pretty good at downin' the rum. Though I admit she be pitch perfect...oooo! New drink! The Pitch Perfect! In honor a' Terrio!
I'm teetering between being scared and flattered. LOL! I can condense. Call me Cambell's. LOL! Not that big a deal, really.
Chance - You don't need me and you know it, but I'll be happy to hear your pitch and give any input I can. No closet locking necessary!
Renee - I knew I liked you for a reason. LOL! The idea I could swagger AND spew brilliant ideas is going to cheer me up for the rest of the day.
I'll take a Pitch Perfect! Lots of ice, it's hot today.
Renee - I fix it for you. No worries.
It's eerily quiet around here. Did I scare everyone off?
That's what I was just thinking. LOL! Where did everybody go? Surely someone else is around here to play along with us. Hal? Marn? Sin?
Sorry! I've been lurking today. Since I just started, I'm no where near ready for this part yet, but I'm taking notes!
But you have a story idea, right? Just tell us what that is? We could end up helping you find some character motivation or something. That's the hardest part for me. When someone asks, "Why is your character doing that?" I always answer, "Because." LOL!
Hey, it works as a parent!
Sorry, I've been in and out of the house and I really have no idea where Julie is. I hope everythin' is ok!
I think the summin' up stuff be hard. We know so much 'bout our stories that ta do the one liner stuff is nutty. I mean, other than man/woman/love/hate/trouble... what else is there to say? Once ya begin ta personalize, the words just spill... I like blurbs, because I can be a bit fun wit' them...
Mayhaps that's the trick...just have fun?
So, how do I make a revenge driven story set in a world ripped apart by time eddies fun?
I re-read what Terrio wrote for ya, Hellion. Be a real pirate and steal that. It works! Lie and say ya wrote it...
We need pirate writer buttons fer the Nationals... Sin? Why don't ya design it? ;)
Ahoy! I've been floundering in heavy water (last day of school) and my ship was overloaded (with my kids and a bunch of stowaways!). I've just come from the galley where I prepared my world famous mac'n'cheese for all the scalawags, and have barricaded myself into my office. I hope the door holds. :-)
Thanks, Chance, for inviting me to sail with you for a while. I'm hoping you won't think me too difficult a task master before we're done!
Chance your query letter pitch for Caribbean Spell is great! Have you been sending out your query??? :-)
Your ‘walk-the-plank’ pitch for The Changed World is good, but the opening “Time fell out of place” left me scratching my head a little. Was the rape the event that changed everything for Ivy and Duran? If so, maybe something a little more straight forward would work. Such as: After a brutal sexual assault, Ivy and Duran’s lives are changed forever. She lives to kill her rapist, not settle down with Duran, while he lives for Ivy and fears her thirst for vengeance will make his dream impossible.
These are strong conflicts, great stuff!
Cheers, Julie
Thanks for the warm welcome, Marnee Jo!
Cheers, Julie
Hi Quantum,
Your story sounds like fun! I’m curious to learn more about the man she’s fallen in love with. :-) Do you mind if I take a shot at rearranging things in your pitch to make it a bit less cumbersome? What do you think of this:
Impoverished, half Siren half human Jacqueline has done the impossible – fallen in love with a cricketing human Lord. To earn his love she’ll have to fight not only the social barriers keeping them apart, but her own Siren nature, and win him by fair human means.
Cheers, Julie
Renee Lynn, if there’s one thing I’ve learned about this business it’s that everyone wants something different. Different lengths of a synopsis, different ways to calculate a word count, different fonts. I could go on forever.
Personally, I’d prefer a different kind of buffet – one that’s exclusively chocolate!
Cheers, Julie
Hellion, Terrio took the words out of my mouth. She’s trimmed it down into an excellent ‘walk-the-plank’ pitch. Great work, Terrio!
Cheers, Julie
Hi Janga,
This is a great pitch, but I see some places where you could tighten it up. How does this grab you?
Dori Marshall fled the spotlight of her husband’s celebrity to establish a simple, secure, contented life in her hometown of Gentry, Georgia, a life she’s determined to preserve and protect for her daughter and for herself. But her resolve weakens when the ex-husband who still haunts her heart arrives in Gentry to reclaim the family he lost.
Cheers, Julie
Terrio,
It might have been hard, but you did a great job!! Excellent pitch!
Cheers, Julie
Renee Lynn, your one and two line pitches for Cherish Me are awesome and ready to roll!
Cheers, Julie
Ahoy! Welcome aboard, Julie! I be pitchin' ACS all over the place. I chatter 'bout it ta the point a' bein' looked at funny. And will likely do the same at the Nationals in DC next month...
The time thing is a hard thing ta sum up. It's a world inspired by the History Channel series "Life After People"...'cept in my book, there be some people and all sorts a' artifacts from the world before a cosmic time 'burp' sped time up (like the special effects in the series) leaving the world changed.
How to sum that up? ;)
Here, I'll 'elps ya barricade the door. 'ave a Pitch Perfect...
*kicks a pebble with her toe*
Gosh, thanks. LOL! It's easier to do someone else's book than your own, I think.
Chance - I'm sure we can come up with something.
Renee Lynn, your Bewitching the Highlander story sounds awesome! I love it! I can see what you mean about run-on sentences. I took a stab at paring yours down a little. What do you think?
A witch or nuisance~can a Highlander turned English border warden save the bewitching beauty’s neck without losing his head?
All Fiona Graem wants is for the world to see her for who she really is-human, not a witch, but when Lord Woodhaven wrongly accuses her brother of witchcraft she must do everything in her power to save him, including casting a spell of seduction upon the man who claims not to believe in superstitions.
To save his clan from annihilation, cool-headed, highlander Gavin Woodrington must bring peace to the border, and he’s up to the challenge, until a supposed witch curses his ballocks to a never ending fire setting his entire body aflame with desire…for her.
Cheers, Julie
For the last two millennia, angelic warrior Nikias has devoted his life to returning demons that possess humans to hell. He allows nothing to distract him from his mission—a lesson he learned after a judgment lapse in mortality caused his death and the death of his team. But when unprecedented demon activity threatens Nik’s group of fighters, he’s forced to accept the help of a prophet and fears she may be the one temptation he can’t resist.
Nine years ago, prophet Sarah Jones’ predictions started a chain reaction that could allow demons to destroy humanity. To protect her foster father, she fled from home and has sought a way to undo the damage she’s done ever since. But when her foster father is killed by the demons of her nightmares, she sets out to avenge his death—even if it means using the powers she fears and losing the man she’s come to love.
Ok, this is the rough draft of my query letter. I can't cut today, my allergies hurt too bad. I humbly bow to you all.
"...curses his ballocks to a never ending fire setting his entire body aflame with desire..."
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Julie, ya gots a way wit' words!
'scuse me, I gots ta fetch a shamwow ta wipe down me screen... When am I gonna learn not ta read comments when sippin' me drink?
And these have all been wonderful. I'm sorry I've been away today, it's been really crazy busy here.
Renee, yours sound great! Go you! :)
Two sentences is really really tough. Julie, you are definitely my idol.
Marn! I'm sorry ta hear yer sufferin' wit' demon pollen allergies... Hard ta think clearly when the head be a block a' concrete. Meds 'elp me when the blighters strike, but that be a whole 'nother set 'a problems!
How about this, Marn?
Angelic warrior, Nikias, and his group of demon fighters find themselves facing more demons than usual, forcing them to accept the help of a prophet bent on revenge. Sarah Jones may have unleashed the demons who killed her father, but she'll face her fears, and one stubborn angel, if that's what it takes to avenge his death.
Thank you, Julie, it's awesome and you didn't change much.
Renee
Maybe that should be "vengeance" instead of "revenge"? And the wording of "facing" and "forcing" are throwing me off.
Oh, and I haven't read the book so I have no idea if he's stubborn. But I figure most men are so it might work. LOL!
Hi Marnee Jo,
Love your story! Here's a shorter version. Not sure if you'll like this or not, but it's a start. Hope you're feeling better soon!
Warrior angel, Nikias, has one job, to damn demons who posses human souls to hell, but when unprecedented demon activity threatens to break free he’s forced to accept the help of the human prophet who started it all and fears she may be the one temptation he can’t resist.
Sarah Jones’ search for a way to undo the damage she caused nine years ago has taken over her life, but when demons kill her father, revenge becomes her mission —even if it means using the powers she fears and losing the man she’s come to love.
Cheers, Julie
Terrio, I like your version of Marnee Jo's pitch too!
Cheers, Julie
Oh, you got so much more into your two sentences. LOL!
What about voice? I've heard your voice should make it into your query, should it also make it into your pitch?
Marnee, your story sounds fab. Hope you get to feeling better.
Janga, I haven't made a picture quilt in ages, and I only did it once, will never do it again.
Hellie, you're always exciting even when you think you aren't.
Q, I'm all over the siren. Got to love them. My next tattoo will be of a selkie.
Chance, I love your enthusiasm.
Sabrina, come on, give it a try.
We all know Terri is rockin' this boat with her wit. Those of you who aren't going to D.C. should send Terr on a mission. :)
Pirate buttons, I want one!
I need my caffeine, ASAP!
I'm here, I'm struggling (still) but I am here and taking notes. I'll continue working on mine and if I come up with something that doesn't embarass me, I'll post it. (Don't hold your breath.)
Pirate buttons? I want one, too!
Awesome blog, Julie!
Di
Julie said:
Hi Quantum,
Your story sounds like fun! I’m curious to learn more about the man she’s fallen in love with. Do you mind if I take a shot at rearranging things in your pitch to make it a bit less cumbersome? What do you think of this:
Impoverished, half Siren half human Jacqueline has done the impossible – fallen in love with a cricketing human Lord. To earn his love she’ll have to fight not only the social barriers keeping them apart, but her own Siren nature, and win him by fair human means.
I like it Julie. Thanks a lot!
I reckon thats even better than Terri could do. 8)
It would need another sentence to introduce the human lover, and actually, the story is only half finished as yet.
Renee, a tattoo of a selkie sounds really seductive.
If I ever finish my book I might consider one for myself, but my Sea Siren would have to be holding a cricket ball.
Fascinating to get the low down on other people's stories.
Fabulous blog today! :D
Okay ladies - this is beyond rough...first time I've ever even thought about how to explain the story...
Joe’s estranged father of 20 years passes away and his dying wish is for her to take over the diner he dedicated his life to. Thinking that closing the diner will provide a good break from her high-powered job and a chance to quiet the questions she has about her life, Joe heads to the small town she abandoned as a child. There she meets golden-boy Mack and she struggles to remember what was so great about her big-city life. Joe’s surprised to find she wants to battle to keep the diner, but wonder if she can keep her heart safe from Mack?
I'm SO sorry I'm late today! I've been off work today and scheduled a day of just relaxing. :(
Okay. I'm not good at this pitching stuff. I've not had to pitch anything yet or write up a synopsis. In fact, I don't plot much so I'm not sure I can do this three sentence thing. But I'm going to try.
Gah, this is going to be horrible.
Sadie Michaels is my character.
Her motivation is to clear her name and find who killed her twin sister 10 years prior.
She can't have closure because her sister wasn't murder. Her sister is a contract killer and once Sadie is released from the mental instution her mother committed her to, Kady is hired to kill Sadie to keep the real truth from coming out.
Now, I'm not sure how I'd pitch that without sounding completely mad.
And yes pirates, my story is completely different from when I started. LOL
Julie, thank you so much for coming aboard! Your blog was fabulous!
I'll let ya know when Julie teaches the online class again...she's scrumptious at the fast pitch! And really good with synopsis!
Renee...I'm enthusiastic? Really!!! How can you tell!!!!!
The fun thing about tryin' to work these things out is the pronoun confusion... She...he...huh? Which she? Toss a villain into it and *bam!* Total mayhem...who's on first!?
Try ta fit in action and I'm lost. Stick wit' the relationship, I guess.
Like yours, Sin... Two females and a mother. Why mention it was Mom who committed 'er? Take that out and it simplifies the pitch. Sure, it's a neat detail...but ya gots ta leave somethin' fer the rest a' the conversation!
Terrio, you're right, your voice should definitely be in your pitch. That's a tough order sometimes, but it's why I had so many different writing exercises in the blog post. Writing your pitch over and over, in as many ways as you can, will help you refine your pitch in your own words.
My favorite is the food label pitch - you can have so much fun with that!
Cheers, Julie
Sabrina, this is a great start! You’ve got it all here, just a few too many details for a ‘walk-the-plank’ pitch. I managed to bring it down to 80 words. But, it's pretty bland. Give it another go with YOUR voice. :-)
When Joe’s estranged father dies, his last wish is for her to take over his pride and joy – his diner, but she believes closing it and walking away from her small town roots is the only way for her to truly say goodbye and get on with her life. But when she gets there, Joe finds the last thing she thought she needed, love, from a small town golden-boy, and acceptance from a community she thought she’d never fit into.
Cheers, Julie
Ooh! Sin! This is a delicious sounding story – a twin who’s truly evil and the other who thinks she’s dead and is out to avenge her. Love it!!
I saw a couple of places where you could tighten it up though. What do you think of this?
Ten years ago Sadie Michaels was wrongfully interred in a mental institution after witnessing her twin sister Kady's murder. Sadie has two goals now: escape and revenge, but what she doesn’t know is that Kady isn’t dead, she’s a contract killer and her next target is Sadie.
Cheers, Julie
How the hell did she do that? What do you think, Sin?
They can't make their own hotdogs? Break out the cat o' nine tails, Julie!
Di R, don't be shy, post away! The more the merrier on this pirate ship. :-)
Cheers, Julie (who is supposed to be back in the galley making the ever popular hot dogs! Do men and children EVER get full???)
Q - I'm honored to be thought of as *almost* as good as Julie. LOL! Goodness knows that's a stretch!
I'm loving the one for Sin's story.
Sabrina - That's a fantastic start. And sounds like something I would write. Straight contemp/no guns/no booms/just ordinary people. LOVE IT!
Di - Come on, we know you've got something good. Let us see.
Hi Julie,
I noticed on your website that you are giving your Query Letters That Sell class next April for the NEORWA. That is my local chapter, so I'll be there ready to learn more.
You asked for it, so here goes:
Caitlyn Donahue wants a place of her own, away from her over-protective brothers,she purchases her dream house situated near an orchard. The day she gets her keys she finds Devin Alexander,her brothers old army buddy, walking around her home. His company has bought the orchard, and he mistakenly believes her house, and is planning to put in a housing development.
Ugh, this is bad.
Di
Stopping to say, YOU GO SABRINA! That first time is always hard and you stepped out and gave it a go.
Di, I think this is really cute! I also think you could have fun with it. Here's an example, I'm probably off base with what you've written, but I wanted to show you how you could play around with the pitch to get something eye-catching. :-)
Sick and tired of being smothered by over-protective brothers, Caitlyn Donahue has just bought her dream ‘free of male testosterone’ home situated near a peaceful orchard. But the day she gets the keys, she discovers one of her brother’s muscle-bound army buddies walking around the place like he owns it and he tells her he’s planning to bulldoze the place for a housing development. This means war!
Am I close? :-)
Cheers, Julie
Great job, Di! And great job Julie changing it up. It's almost like we're giving you play-do and your genius turns it into classy pottery. LOL!
Thanks so much for being here!
Oh, wow! Thanks Julie! I think I can tweak that and work with it. :)
And thanks everyone for your good wishes on my allergies. Ugh. It's been raining here for weeks and now it's all humid. First it was mold spores and now I have no idea what is causing it. I feel ok now. Drugs help. LOL!!
It's been a pleasure sailing with you! Thanks for having me and for all the rum (thanks to the scalawags I needed it!). :-)
Cheers, Julie
Julie,
It's perfect!
I've been stuck in my story for over a week and suddenly the light bulb just went on.
Thank You!!
Di
Shapeshifter Micah Sloane will do anything to protect his kind from the threat of outsiders. Reluctant empath Shiloh Beck will do anything to escape from a dangerous organization. Fate brings them together, but will they survive when the legend of the wolves collides with the men behind the Institute?
OMgosh! How does she do that!
Julie, wow!
- polishing the glasses and tankards from Friday. 2nd Chance leans on the bar and slips Sin's glass away to be cleaned...
Tol' ya! Ain't she impressive? I thought she summed yer story up brilliantly, Sin! We'll 'ave ta ask her back in a few months. I wanna try the exercise with the ingredient label...
;)
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